Rejections from Literary Agents: #5

Dear Susannah,

i read your proposal over the long weekend and have some thoughts about it.  My first question to you is what is this book about in your view?  Is it a [redacted] and if so, hasn't that already been done?  It's not clear what your point of view is on the whole issue nor what the point of the book is.  I understand that [redacted] but why should we care?  Why is this a bad thing?  These are not people we care about as characters so I'm not sure we should care that [redacted].

You write about the [redacted] but it's not clear whether you think this is ridiculous or not.  It is interesting that [redacted] but not sure where that takes us.

In reading [redacted] I'm not sure I understand why you [redacted] is a good thing.  What is the point ofthat?  And what is the reason to not condemn [redacted] and the [redacted] and then [redacted] in the beginning of the story?

I guess my response to this is that i don't see the book in this.  I get that you are [redacted] but unless there are reasons to care about this world and make it interesting, I don't see what the purpose of the book is.  Or what your thesis is for writing the book.  So perhaps I am simply not the right agent for you on this topic. Or perhaps I need a clearer and more articulate answer to what this book is meant to be. 

With all best wishes,

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